User blog comment:Nikolai Banks/Scary Dreams that kill/@comment-3135907-20110326143208

I've read the whole thing now. There's a few wording errors, such as where Derrick says ''"Forgive Launce, he is still a bit grumpy because his wife is out of the country for the next month. AM NOT, she wrote to me yesterday." Said Launce glancing over at Derrick. It would be clearer what they are saying if you added a " at the end of "Forgive Launce he is still a bit grumpy because his wife is out of the country for next month. and another at the start of AM NOT she wrote to me yesterday"'' where you can devide Derrick's words from Launce's. But it is a very good storyline, I like it! KIU!