Talk:The Story of Idunn Jarl/@comment-32303-20150808115121

I noticed something. You have "Ruark Boldstream was dead" down twice. I think it might flow better if you took the first place you have the death mention out and keep the second, because there it mentions Ruark's ottercrew and it can go right into "Ruark had been killed during the seizing of the Abbey"? Just a suggestion. I'm REALLY enjoying this so far.