User blog comment:Dewface/At the Gates of Dark Forest/@comment-1298206-20120606012718

It's really short, but good stories don't have to be long. You could write in a way that makes it a bit more detailed and more well-written. For instance, let me show you an exert from the story and how it could have been worded and tell me which is more interesting.

"I don't know, should we go see?" Nadalie said with her eye on the bush. She got no answer from Arulin. "Nadalie?" Arulin said, turning to see where she was. A large rat was where Arulin had been before the bush russled. He had tribal face paint on his face.

Nadalie didn't dare remove her gaze from the bush, uncertain about what may come out of it if she did."I-I don't know...Do you think we should go see what it was?" She expected to hear Arulin's reply, but was greeted only by silence. Arulin turned. "Nadalie?" Standing where Nadalie had been mere moments ago stood a large rat who was barbaric in appearance due to the tribal markings that covered his face.

I didn't think it was too graphic, so don't worry about that. Now if you wanted me to, I could provide you with a grotesque description if you so wished... >:)