User blog comment:Skalarana/The Heartless/@comment-4423064-20130117012541

I love this as a start to it all! It makes a ton of sense for Salm to arrive in such a way and do that. But I especially loved the line "He scooped up the crying baby boy and study him as if he was a nice slab of beef hanging in the butcher’s window."

One bit of advice I will give that I got from one of my teachers is that using verbs to describe things does wonders.