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The moon hung over the trees, bathing the world in dim yellow light. a young ermine crouched, a sinister smile flicking his lips as he watched his victim, a sinewy pine marten, make and effort to stand up from his last attack. when his foe stood, the Ermine smiled wider, his eyes mad.

Like a bolt of lightning, the ermine lunged. he didn't not knock the marten over, or throw himslef upon him, in fact he seemed to breeze by him, his claws out stretched. the martens eyes went wide with shock as his oponent passed him. the ermine turned, brushing his bangs out of his face, smiling. blood dripped down the Martens throat.

"H-How dare you-

"Something wrong Jauqe? a sore throat perhaps?" Dren walked over and clutched the martens chin between his thumb and forefinger, his eyes lit with madness. "Shouldn't have toaught me to hate Jauqe. i've been waiting for this all my life, ya know that?" his grin widened. "My whole life you stood over me, tormenting me, so i'd become a monster. you succeded. but i'm not broken that easily. i regained my sanity. i killed the guard you put over me when he fed me. now here we are. shouldn't have taught me to hate."

Jauqe's eyes narrowed. "you are nothing but a worthless slave. you think you've got rid of your madenss? it will come back. you'll forever be the slave to blood lust."

"That was your plan wasn't it Jauqe?" Dren's eyes widened with delight at his foes fear. "drive me insane with pain and create a fighting machine, thats what you and Nagru were thinking wasn't it? i was never soemthing you could control, you knew that, that's why you worked your hardest with me. good bye Jauqe."

there was a sickening snap as Dren twisted the martens head all the way around on his neck. he let go of the corpse, his eyes still alight with madness.

"and horrid nightmares."